Animation Workshop Feedback - Charlie #2a (2023)

[Music] all right new version here there's no sound let's check it out and boom all right now you're mentioning here that you feel like the upper body is messy that's a slight set back I don't know I think the biggest area to fix is this in the upper and head area yeah where it feels messy like that that's probably what you're reacting to the most things I've gotten a lot cleaner and for something like this um that's the general tip I would always look at what the route is doing first sudden speed changes not enough enough up and down or too much or you any kind of kind of hiccups and I feel like there's a little bit right there right through there it gets a bit too fast cuz the thing is when that happens and it speeds up a bit the root is going to affect everything around it you know obviously to some degree it's going to fade out but that is going to affect the chest for sure and then the head so if you look at that moment I can see a speed up and then you look at the spacing and then you look at how you're moving your head back you can see that suddenly we have this line here hold on scanning here so imagine that wall see this and you got that moment of just hitting it so now you have a sudden acceleration in here then it suddenly slows down which slows down everything and at the same time it feels like you're rotating it back and and doing something in the head here where now you have a weird freezing intu space it kind of locks until it moves forward that to me is the biggest thing I feel it a little bit through there it's a little bit of a pause but the biggest point to me would be here in terms of the broader mechanics and how things move might argue that right through there and for this moment mostly through here what happens is I think is you're moving towards camera like straight towards camera just for the section and the tricky thing is with anything straight towards camera you can draw lines here and you can see that it's not really deviating too much from those lines because it's to camera instead of doing a a more a broader side step first so if you're doing this and also don't forget any type of hip involvement so you're lifting this leg up here more weight is going to be on this that hip is going to shoot up it's going to be more like that until you put weight on this here and then you go into this so what I would do is probably you can also bring that foot down sooner and then you can start leaning over to the left more instead of coming towards us which is going to help that little moment of it's also it feels like the transcend rotate is a bit even in timing too like that's going to be your graph your curve in the graph editor then this is probably the messiest part and there a couple things you start to have a very isolated head orientation where you can see you're starting to have you an overall curve but it feels already a bit broken where I probably keep it more in line with this that feels better but you can see how that that head just kind of moves separately and once you do something like this and you have no like facial like blinks darts or anything it starts to feel very stiff and puppet and maybe that that plays a part in how you're perceiving this but now if you look at the spacing of the head it moves over and then bam you can see here this is the wall right there goes to the right B stops then it moves to the left but then kind of change direction again a bit quickly and then you have it move will pop up to the right then back to the left with a really fast drop but then on that impact it doesn't compress as much as in more down like this you're going down and then immediately to the right and then immediately up into this and even this doesn't have recovery up where you might go or or that it just goes up and then hits a wall again and then goes to the left so if I'm looking at what's happening this seems to be all through here it's the chest that seems to be the culprate because I look at the root here and that seems pretty good if you ignore everything else and if I can zoom in to just look at the root more or less feels pretty good so that you know you're going to be okay so what is going on in the chest look at it from the side view I'm slightly concerned that at this point this is your stomach and then this is the upper body and then you got the head here you know going the other way this way and it doesn't quite feel like this feels like a bit of a broken section through there and I think this is again happening here this feels fairly straight and your chest is probably doing this so make sure you're rotating the whole thing forward and so that you don't have this break but also just watch your curves that you don't have anything where your your curves your rotations are suddenly like this or you have a sudden stop and it feels like that's what's going on you got a rotation down and then you have a selling rotation over this way and sing rotation over there so all that is going to trickle into the head which then makes a crazy Arc so I think for this section really look at what the chest is doing cuz cuz even here I see a slight change going back and then back down back down again so stabilize that chest keep it as one nice line of action so it doesn't feel broken right and then look at maybe a camera from this angle so you can have a very clean compression and then return and once that is cleaned up it's going to automatically clean up the head as well but once that that's done here once that is done then you can do the Head Pass where you kind of look at what is going on and where you can track your arcs but I would also slow this down if I am playing this bit slower just that drop here feels better and then they're little things like when you bring over this chair this feels pretty broken that wrist you're going to have to watch a couple things you have that space that goes forward and suddenly it stops you can see here you have kind of a lock on that elbow right there uper arm doesn't do anything starts to bend but have a really really over rotated wrist and it's very isolated there like it should be more in at this point throughout so here you would have to bring that chair for this way or rotate it sooner so that that wrist is more aligned and looking a bit more like this even that's pushing it that feels a bit more comfortable and the rest feels pretty okay my thing is the moment you start you know maybe tweaking a little bit of this but mostly that again it's going to change what the arm is doing so all of this is going to feel and look different so I would I would wait with any type of fixes there you still have a bit of a separate wrist move here right that feels a bit too far like this I would just keep it fairly relaxed throughout and not have that wobble right there but that's kind of that I think it's better than you think you might be just discouraged with this section there I don't know there's nothing else in email so this could be it let me know if that makes sense and if you can if you're able to clean this up and you know how to clean it up and look at your arcs if not send me your mayia scene and I'll take a look from this angle and I can record it I can see kind of just quickly just for this section what is going on and how I will break it up into separate passes to clean things up if that makes sense all righty thanks all right there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whenever you want you get 16 submissions either way a like And subscribe would be awesome all right thank [Music] you