Animation Workshop Feedback - Anonymous #4a (2023)

[Music] all righty new version here with sound let's check it out it looks like a bug trapped under a glass I Googled that bug it's some sort of demonic Cricket that takes chunks out of your skin when provoked chunks is the word that Google used all right I think this definitely works a lot better beginning is a lot clearer not that it was like not clear but the way you go back and forth I think works really well I like that he is now adjusting his look but the thing is it's a bit low I think if I py I would bring down that eyeline just a bit more especially she's still there but then he's looking kind of at the forehead still kind of forehead now it's okay so I would adjust that still a little bit more even here feels like he's a bit high that PG it's some sort of demonic Cricket that takes chunks it's not too bad through here I mean he's not quite looking at her anyway even that is a bit High to be honest I know I'm kind of picky but he has you know his eyes are so wide it's such a big Focus point that I would really make sure that it's just a bit lower and then from a technical point of view it out on her it's not too bad but it's it goes down a bit one way but it's mostly going up one it's mostly an one axis up and down I think you can be a bit broader with the little Arc it looks and it stops a bit harshly I think you can go like a bit of a change in there so it's not just this almost feels like a translate forward it looks like a bug it looks like and then even here on looks it just gets very isolated in the jaw and watch out I think we're pinching these Corners a bit the shapes are bit bit bit wonky there see some pinching and I think on on this I would bring down the head as well imagine the jaw is pulling down the head does nothing be massive just a bit of keep alive in there so it doesn't feel so isolated and then you can go back up the way you have it here but again keep going and then overshooting back so that you don't have this here it's very isolated and nothing else is moving for quite some time bug trapped under a glass then it gets a bit better there here gets a bit stiff where chest neck and head are moving mostly as one I see a broader rotation on the head but once you get up here again it gets very stiff where all that stuff feels just a bit too parented together and then spacing wise if you track that nose let's go back here hold on on sking I feel like if I am trying to stay where that nose tip is whoa and then down here uh it feels kind of locked in there who and then over there wherever that nose is I'm kind of pretending here and then kind of stuck there oh and over you mean so you can see what's going on there it starts okay A bit of a dip there and then Sho that one's harsh that's a very linear change through there and then you got that that odd away from us and then to the left so I Googled that some of that stuff need some smoothing out I feel like you worked a lot more on this so that's I get it that this is rougher just pointing it out and then the other part demonic Cricket it's a bit tricky because it's that that is in you know subjective land basically takes chunks out of this still feels a bit soft in terms of chunks there's an offset yes chunks not massive though but there's something about or maybe you want him to be kind of softer in this chunks but I feel like this could be that takes chunks instead of a kind of a Down wavy it's almost like imagine he's now bringing his finger forward and kind of claw like a more of a claw gesture chunks out of your skin when provoked chunk and then that one and these are the two like even this it's kind okay that's like yeah a little thing but when provoked chunks is the word that that is bit odd because i' I see chunks first it feels like a bit more of a generic unfolding of an arm into this this just a a fairly generic gesture and then it goes into bit of a drag and now you have something a bit more specific but whoa then we have this here that draws attention so I'm looking here I'm looking here is the word that Google used and then even though it's kind of like in within the same pose kind of like a just more than a sub pose but I'm not sure about word that Google used I'm just not sure about this we're staying in that bit of a generic pose but then we have word that gole used we have that I'm just not sure what that should mean in terms of acting that's very like a vague critique but it's basically not my thing it doesn't mean anything you know I mean it's very subjective chunks is the word that Google used I'm just not sure it it just seems like what is he trying to say it is more like hey I'm explaining this to you it could work if you just keep this here imagine still in the Fist and it's almostly in here and then we have a broader thing with two arms like maybe that would even fix it sorry uh this in terms of a silhouette I was a bit wonky I would then maybe try to bring that in and out a bit more so we are into you know a a broader hand out gesture here it still would be enough you know in terms of asymmetry chunks but I think what would help is if you are if you would tell me just like in written words what you're trying to accomplish with this and this this and then that at the end like what what your thought process is and what how he is feeling and what how that translates into this gesture acting I'm just curious before I go into more like well I think it should be like this which it doesn't really matter what I think I mean this is your it's your shot I I can give you comments on technical things but I don't want to shoehorn some acting choices in there that you don't agree with but I would like to know more about what you're thinking at that point here uh and your email I can probably you're asking here I was wondering what you thought about play blast versus rendered shots in reals I'm more of a play blast play blast person versus renders unless the animation is 110% awesome I say it is and I love to render my own stuff and it's definitely not 110% but that's more like I want to learn about renders but once you put it on your real the the danger is that if you have something that's lit and it's really well lit but if it's not well lit and like it kind of distracts from the animation right because it's badly lit chop but if you give it to someone or you're really good at lighting the danger is that if something isn't working your animation but you have all the beautiful lighting it feels like oh are you trying to distract from your animation by making it prettier and then the thought is why didn't you spend that time animating it more instead of lighting and rendering it that's kind of the pitfall um that you're getting into and the other question here you're wondering what kind of background be important to add from a context it's a good question it looks like a bug trapped under a glass I Googled that bug it's some sort of I mean this could be just you know I mean they could be brothers and sisters they could be partners like whatever it is this could just be in a room it could be in a lab I mean could also be in a restaurant I don't know I think I'm not sure if you need a specific Contex thing I would just make this B with a dirty glass so we don't see the bug or you want animate a little bug in there but then that could be distracting as well it could just be like a paper paper cup well then you couldn't see inside I guess so maybe something maybe at the beginning a bug and it falls down I don't know I feel like you opening up can of worms um you know unless this is not transparent and no I was going to think then you see some little little legs come out and go back in but then they wouldn't be trapped so I don't know I don't think the background is massively needed in terms of a major thought process um but yeah I'm going to leave it at that I think I'm just very about your ending the rest works really well it's just cleanup arcs and eyelines this I just feel like I'm not super Smitten by it but again that's very subjective and I want to hear more about your thoughts and then we can we can figure something out there all right thanks all right there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whenever you want you get 16 submissions either way a like And subscribe would be awesome all right thank [Music] you