Animation Workshop Feedback - Anonymous #1b (2023)

[Music] all right new version it looks like a bug trapped under a glass I Googled that bug it's some sort of demonic Cricket that takes chunks out of your skin when provoked chunks is the word that Google used cool I like it definitely more focused in terms of what the characters are doing where they're looking I do like that were you added that full turnaround and I think it's okay since he has the most tension here I think it's okay for her and I like that Poe too with this here it's great it looks like a just careful what I would say is that upwards move they're really in sync she goes up he goes up here looks I think I would just go after it Raven cheese done this is for me no that's a full screen here and there you go R 42 that's when I would initiate this and it's you know it's not much what is this two two frames earlier so maybe 41 looks yeah just a bit earlier just a smidgen it it looks like yeah he does have the reaction in his eyes but it's this that I'm trying to uncouple then going up at the same time it's like a bug tra this I don't mind that overlap here trapped under a glass and I do like so she gets up and then over so the I have two notes in terms of I mean this this was already a note but the two biggest things that that so three I would say not that this is huge but I would still uncouple this the bigger one to me is this here when she starts turning yes he has a dart up but there's no adjustment to me at this point point he is looking up and past her you mean like here I buy it somewhere around the ear trying to draw but anyway and then now he's kind of spaced out and by now she took a ginormous step to the left and he just a too high and too far to the side here is better it's a bit too low the too high it's in between that bu some sort this is not I don't know too high to me demonic Cricket that takes chunks not looking at her your skin when provoked now he looks back at her this is probably the one I buy the most in terms of eyeline chunks and then this one's good too this is the word that Google used now suddenly slightly higher I know it's it's very subtle but you have a bit of a change there where suddenly it goes up but it works better in the second half I guess huh the first not so much so to me the biggest one here is just that that turn he would look down Dart around cuz he is really focused on everything she's saying and does right you can see all the little reactions there on something this big to me he would he could even take a tiny step forward but definitely readjust his eyeline and focus maybe not the step forward because he does it already here but it's it's it's to me it's almost like she's turning now she's more receptive to what I'm going to say I'm going to go a little bit closer but maybe just like a a lean forward that then goes into the bigger Lean soone Like You Like a double under a glass I Googled yeah instead of one big one you could do like a tiny like maybe this much but not high but to the left and he goes forwards imagine he's starting to lean like in your in your rotation it wouldn't be like right now it feels like you have a lean and then you could do a something like that you lean slight Paws not flat but slight Paws around it in the curve and forward that bug it's some sort of demonic Cricket that takes chunks out of that takes chunks slightly I like the asymmetry but then at this point we're suddenly to me to mirrored even though we're low here and there's an asymmetry here just the action suddenly feels Cricket that takes chunks I know it feels a to Twin and also the chunks part because of this here it's to me it's more like a dipping it's almost like oh man this is such an old reference like Palmer Leaf used to be uh I don't know how you pronounce that correctly it's when I used to hear it as a kid in Switzerland but like you would be like green dish soap or something and there was a commercial that you put your fingers in your fingertips it would be good for your fingers I don't know that's what this reminds me of is so weird punks and not as in like a chunk grabbing or being pull or something I'm not quite connecting that gesture which is of course Very subjective but that's my my kind of worry there chunks out of your skin when provoked chunks is this one is the other big one so for me it's a turnaround in his focusun and this one is the up and down down on the head chunks is it's a bit too bouncy this feels to me suddenly overan animated chunks is and I think I mentioned that before but it's it's something where the action is so big in terms of eyes closed the tension here going forward this big move and then you listen to The Voice when provoked chunks it's just not quite there I feel like chunks is the energy visually and chunks is how he says it to me there's so much movement that I I I would hear more strain and energy change in the voice again picky but that's just something I'm just usually picky about provoked chunks so to me it's almost like you can do it instead of skin when provoked chunks instead of this far forward it could be maybe only this far and instead of up like this with the hand it could be like a sideswipe just kind of minimizing keeping the idea but just minimizing the the energy of it is the word that Google used chunks is the word that Google used and don't do it just throwing out an idea cuz it's always like this is a crappy idea or maybe could be or a version of it could be better but I'm wondering what if chunks chunks it's like this is the word that and then is the word that Google used on that thing you relax the fingers and you close up those three and you point and close this and it's almost like is is what Google use it's like a little pointy gesture it's like uh I would say it's a sub POS it's kind of it's a it's a deviation of this here but it's almost like oh I'm already in this pose I might as well the word that Google use now get into a less aggressive pose and more into like an explaining pose with like oh like a little point you like oh that's something by the way that's something that Google said that that could be interesting so you're not stuck in that at the end again subjective but wanted to throw that out there maybe you like it maybe not maybe that gives you another idea for something else um but that's kind of that and again I really like how you tweaked it into her cuz that's again a pose where like I don't really believe in any of this and whatever and I'm just going to take a step back CU you're weird but but I like this this is a really neat pose and it reads really well from like a tricky profile back view so that's really cool all right that's that thanks all right there's an email you can sign up you can start whenever you want you can submit whenever you want you get 16 submissions either way the like And subscribe would be awesome all right thank [Music] you