Animation Workshop Feedback - Valentine Miniot #1 (2023)

[Music] all right new version here with sound let's go yep I said it before and I'll say it again life moves pretty fast you don't stop and look around once in a while you could miss it all right let's go back here here um let me check I don't see anything in the mail in terms of um what's going on I'm not going sure if you're still keeping what you're doing at the end so I'm I'm just going to leave that shot alone since there's also no animation on there um there's still the thing of even though the candle is on the right and it's technically left or right and it is still left to right it's just an odd thing of him looking right to left and then we go this this way this is very subjective might just be me but I would try to have something at the end where the ey line is this way that way it cuts a bit better again subjectively I'm still not a massive fan of this look plus that image versus just geometry it also kind of flattens it looks like a painted backdrop I don't which it is but you know it's like it just flattens everything doesn't give you any depth or something I would have something where I would put in geometry and and like really crappily rebuild this but then put Hardware fog and and Haze it and put some maybe can put some flickering lights if you want some mood in there in terms of the animation I think the energy level with the audio that works just at the end it's kind of like a kind of long exhale and then an inhale don't hear it but you know it's there there's something about him going down where at the end it's very much focused in here just mechanics wise but there's such a exhale that you're missing seeing compression in the stomach changes in here maybe a little bit more continuous bending down or bending over because of that exhale it just seems a bit too isolated in here yep and I don't know am I sure if I'm seeing anything here during the cuz there's such a if you if you listen to the lip smack it's such a big thing that even though it's kind of hidden with this and the nose it could be something where you can have a little bit of a head rotation kind of a little bit of a like a roll bit an accent in there to to mix that you yours going to have elements and and energy peaks in the audio and you want to reflect that somehow in the body three to head accent lip sync whatever it is it doesn't feel like body is doing one thing while the energy level is different in the audio if that makes sense this is subtle though but just a little thing watch out too mechanically he leans over it's not too bad in terms of the hold is a little bit harsh how he comes to a stop right there it's a little bit hitting in an invisible wall I would soften that ease in and out a bit more and the same thing there as he goes to the left it's a sudden acceleration that's a bit fast but then it feels like we're stopping a bit abruptly right through there like that's an invisible wall right there let me take the other line out but if watch this right there I know we continue to the left afterwards also with the bend but if you just track that line in terms of what that spacing is doing we're heading over there and then just kind of stops a bit too harshly again I would overshoot a bit more and it's it's a tricky thing because you're stopping visually it looks like you're stopping here while this continues with the hip change and a rotation there so you might have to kind of ease into that overall translate a bit more so by now this line is maybe here and then you can kind of back a bit that might help you with exhale so that throughout this it's not so locked here but you're moving like this whole body back into the position that you have here if that makes sense so you go over to the left keep going and and ease in so that by now you might have this line here or maybe a bit less and then you come back into a soft stop into where you are right now that way you don't have to change too much animation and it fits into that exhale yep I do like this though just watch out that it's not just in one axis I like what you're doing facially but you can have bit of a bit of a side tilt where the chin moves over this way so it's not in one axis but you want to make it complexity wise all three I said it before and I'll say it again I do like this I said it before and I'll say and I love how you're leading with this side and look and then you turn say it again it's it's a bit flat that head turn you can prob a little bit more an arc say it again say it again kind of a say it again life I said it before and I'll say it again life Mo that is also a bit fast if you listen to his audio I said it before and I'll say it again I'll say say it again again the energy goes down life moves life moves like having say it again say it again that energy dip but it's only this really fast move life it doesn't quite doesn't quite mix well I would slow that down and you can always have a slower so that this life moves this peak just happens just a bit later life moves pretty fast I don't mind pretty fast pretty fast I don't mind that section moves pretty fast and this is a it's also a bit fast with this object coming in but there's also a bit of a mismatch where given that Arc it feels like and looks like an under Arc as you can see here right but then I know it's like implied that well it will have to come back down and is that what we're seeing but the way it cuts it feels like under upper that's a bit jarring moves pretty fast you don't stop and look around once in a while and in this section the lip sync is a bit muddy fast life moves pretty fast fast I'm turn on the scrubbing here hold on life moves pretty fast this is an S fast so you're going to have to have to put the teeth together for the S sound you don't stop and I think going from this shape right so this is a bit even feel like like curves are like this and graph they're very linear you don't stop so I will go into shoot that a bit faster then that way you don't you the U shape will be a bit faster as well you don't stop and look around once you don't stop and look around and then what I'm seeing here the mushy aspect is that it feels like the corners here here like there's an overall wave once in in the lip sync where stop and look around like you have an asymmetry here but in suddenly only this section comes up there are a lot of busy shapes here once in a while a while while and on while the mouth is closed so it just seems the timing is off and some of the shapes are off in places you could miss it you could miss even here how you anticipate going into you it just seems very even in timing where you have a key here here and then a key here you could miss it let me turn this back on hold on you it you could miss it even here I feel like the S is what try for this the S is a bit late for miss it like that's your s shape and that's that Ferris sper makes me want to watch shot again all right that's it thanks all right there's an email 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